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So, as the icon denotes, tonight I am working on Belladonna Dreams. I'm having to go back and fix stuff, as all my crits have come back with one major point, which I will now share with you.
"So, if Sapph is so rich and famous, why is she waltzing around with only one bodyguard?"
The snarky answer is, because the author didn't want to write more than one bodyguard. However, this is not the right answer for the story. She WOULD have more than one, and seriously, Maggie doesn't act like a bodyguard. So we rewrite.
I need to come up with four bodyguards, and some annoying "friends" that Sapph can snark at. And Maggie morphs to a personal assistant. And then I have to fix the outline, because this adds another level to it.
Will it make the book better? Yes.
Is it more work for the author? Yes.
*sigh*
"So, if Sapph is so rich and famous, why is she waltzing around with only one bodyguard?"
The snarky answer is, because the author didn't want to write more than one bodyguard. However, this is not the right answer for the story. She WOULD have more than one, and seriously, Maggie doesn't act like a bodyguard. So we rewrite.
I need to come up with four bodyguards, and some annoying "friends" that Sapph can snark at. And Maggie morphs to a personal assistant. And then I have to fix the outline, because this adds another level to it.
Will it make the book better? Yes.
Is it more work for the author? Yes.
*sigh*
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