starting count: 3250
ending count: 2906
change: -344
starting line:
I wondered which of my elegant ancestors had pinned up their wealth of hair with the pins, then swore as one of the pins shifted and stabbed me in the hand.
ending line:
“Come with me,” he said, and led me, not down the stairs, but off to one side. Still blinded by something, I couldn’t resist, nor did I want to.
darling:
Jasmine filled my nose, wrapping around me in a sweet fog that blinded me for a long moment, and I put my hand out to steady myself. The banister was warm, smooth wood under my fingers, and I clung to it as the world spun around me. What was going on?
**
Yes, that's a negative word count you see there. I discovered, after carefully plotting out the 3rd person POV version, that I liked the 1st person POV version better. AND then I had a brainstorm. Now I just have to work out the particulars, but this will be a MUCH stronger story. I just have to decide how much magic I want to use - and whether or not my MC survives.
Sometimes it doesn't always work out the way I thought it would, but I think I can salvage a bit from the plot summary I did before, for the 3rd person POV. And yeah, I think lots of magic. Maybe Ally's background is more magical than even she thought...
ending count: 2906
change: -344
starting line:
I wondered which of my elegant ancestors had pinned up their wealth of hair with the pins, then swore as one of the pins shifted and stabbed me in the hand.
ending line:
“Come with me,” he said, and led me, not down the stairs, but off to one side. Still blinded by something, I couldn’t resist, nor did I want to.
darling:
Jasmine filled my nose, wrapping around me in a sweet fog that blinded me for a long moment, and I put my hand out to steady myself. The banister was warm, smooth wood under my fingers, and I clung to it as the world spun around me. What was going on?
**
Yes, that's a negative word count you see there. I discovered, after carefully plotting out the 3rd person POV version, that I liked the 1st person POV version better. AND then I had a brainstorm. Now I just have to work out the particulars, but this will be a MUCH stronger story. I just have to decide how much magic I want to use - and whether or not my MC survives.
Sometimes it doesn't always work out the way I thought it would, but I think I can salvage a bit from the plot summary I did before, for the 3rd person POV. And yeah, I think lots of magic. Maybe Ally's background is more magical than even she thought...
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